poems on the train

Requiem I

The city gives way to fields full of greenhouses,

residue of first frost hidden in the hedgerow

and I am rocked by the train’s lullaby.

How could I have known it would come to this?

Requiem II

C, B, F, A, G, D, WW, W, L, S, S, P, H, B

Fifteen letter alphabet spelling out the litany of a life I did not know

in the heady brain cocaine fuelled days of success.

Fifteen letters sounding out a requiem for a life long gone,

its existence verified by the letter.

Notice of final royalties;

your book is out of print

 

 

 

2nd draft:

Requiem I

City gives way to fields of greenhouses,

residue of first frost hidden in hedgerow.

I am rocked by the train’s lullaby.

How could I have known it would come to this?

 

Requiem II

C, B, F, A, G, D, WW, W, L, S, S, P, H, B

Fifteen letter alphabet spelling out the litany of a life I did not know

in the heady brain cocaine fuelled days of success.

Fifteen letters sounding out a requiem for a life long gone,

its existence verified by the mail.

Notice of final royalties;

your book is out of print

 

 

 

 

2 thoughts on “poems on the train

  1. I would italicise last line in part II and consider losing some of the small words in part I – and us etc just to tighten and enhance? The poetry is a really exciting development to the project, these are excellent.

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